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Originally Posted by
machoman
No doubt about it, my gut instincts were correct when I came across your story. I like the above passage.
You are indeed a brilliant writer, one of the best in this forum.
Kudos for the superb detailed description of the sexual conquest of your “drinking companion”.
machoman, you are too generous with your praises. I have read many other works in SBF, and I feel that there are just too many good writers in here. However since this is the first time I am attempting to pen down an experience, I am just hoping that the response will be good, as testament of my writing skills.
But sadly, after more than 3000 views I still do not have the kind of response or feedback from the other brothers and sisters. I do not mean just in the form of reputation points, but as any story teller would probably know, having people acknowledging your work is the most important inspiration of all. It is akin to having your paintings hung onto the walls of a gallery that nobody visits
Can somebody tell me what am I lacking in my writing style?
I like you writing style very much. the description and flow of the tale is much like a novel.
In SBF there are many that best said to be short stories. Alittle intro and mostly about the act.
Keep up the good work. well done.
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Originally Posted by
issaac72
I like you writing style very much. the description and flow of the tale is much like a novel.
In SBF there are many that best said to be short stories. Alittle intro and mostly about the act.
Keep up the good work. well done.
issaac72: thanks!
Very good story and writing style……Well done
Will reward you once I regain my power.
Keep the flame burning, bro
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Originally Posted by
thomas88
Very good story and writing style……Well done
Will reward you once I regain my power.
Keep the flame burning, bro
Hahaha… Keeping the flame burning is easier said than done bro… this is the first time I’m writing a story and its even harder than writing essays in school… most essays only need to be less than 3000 words and double spaced… and best part is you can plagiarize bits and pieces or furnish quotes… this is different and taking a lot of time!!!
I feel a heavy burden on me to complete the story otherwise it will just leave you guys hanging in limbo!
Thanks for the encouragement!
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Originally Posted by
YourExcellency
machoman, you are too generous with your praises. I have read many other works in SBF, and I feel that there are just too many good writers in here. However since this is the first time I am attempting to pen down an experience, I am just hoping that the response will be good, as testament of my writing skills.
But sadly, after more than 3000 views I still do not have the kind of response or feedback from the other brothers and sisters. I do not mean just in the form of reputation points, but as any story teller would probably know, having people acknowledging your work is the most important inspiration of all. It is akin to having your paintings hung onto the walls of a gallery that nobody visits
Can somebody tell me what am I lacking in my writing style?
Nope bro YE, I definitely know what I’m talking about. I seldom praise story writers unless I feel that they deserve it.
I also definitely know how you feel & oftentimes, it feels kind of lonely as from my own experience, there will be more silent viewers than the ones that are vocal although like you, I also wish that more viewers will write some feedback to the writers to encourage them or offer some comments on the story. As you can see from my siggy, I have also written a few stories.
As far as I am concerned, there is nothing wrong with your wonderful writing style but as the saying goes, “Different strokes for different folks.”
No worries, bro. I am confident that those that really appreciate your fine will writing will come in to support your story, sooner or later.
In the meantime, do keep up the good work.
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Originally Posted by
machoman
Nope bro YE, I definitely know what I’m talking about. I seldom praise story writers unless I feel that they deserve it.
I also definitely know how you feel & oftentimes, it feels kind of lonely as from my own experience, there will be more silent viewers than the ones that are vocal although like you, I also wish that more viewers will write some feedback to the writers to encourage them or offer some comments on the story. As you can see from my siggy, I have also written a few stories.
As far as I am concerned, there is nothing wrong with your wonderful writing style but as the saying goes, “Different strokes for different folks.”
No worries, bro. I am confident that those that really appreciate your fine will writing will come in to support your story, sooner or later.
In the meantime, do keep up the good work.
@machoman, yes I see you have written quite a bit yourself, and I have clear memories of reading your stories, albeit as an unregistered guest.
It is tough to post something and receive no response because, we are after all, human and have a need to feel that we are being accepted. I will do my best to complete the experience as I see more and more people are coming to view my humble thread, some of whom I have benefited from by reading their works.
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Originally Posted by
BT8888
Nice! Keep up the good work.
Camping for more.
@BT: another one of my favorite writers!! I have read your stories and benefitted from you.
Thank you!!
The Morning After
The next morning, I woke up with a huge hardon and a mouth that was attempting to devour my dick. I opened my sleepy eyes and before I could even see how late it was, I was aware of a hungry pair of lips encircling the head of my penis. Liz was under the sheets and I couldn’t see her at all. I pulled the sheets away and there she was, as bare as a , with her long sexy hair all mussed up and wearing a sexy smile as she said, “
Good morning, hunk
” with my penis in her mouth. She continued sucking on the head, while alternating using her hands to rub the shaft, and cupping my balls gently. (You know that feeling of cupping but not really fully cupping?) God, it was a fantastic feeling to wake up to a blowjob! I had had a good night’s rest and my penis was all charged up, ready to go! (God bless morning wood!) I pulled her up and pulled her into a sixty-nine, taking in her wonderful womanly scent and proceeded to attack her click. This time there was no teasing, there was just an animalistic desire to fulfill her needs, and mine. After a good 10 minutes of making love to each other using our mouths, we were both getting jawlocked. I moved away from the middle, grabbed a condom from the side table, rolled on the condom faster than you could say “BOO”, and sat at the edge of the bed, pulled her towards me. Knowing instinctively what I wanted, she positioned herself so that she was straddling me, with both her long slender legs on either side of my body and slowly began to ease herself down on my dick.
“
Ahhh…… I feel so good with you inside… i feel so complete, like after a satisfying meal of my favorite food…. I can feel your head pushing into me… AHHHHHHHHHHH……
”, damn… I could listen to that on repeat all day long… it was like music to my ears.
Once I had fully penetrated her, she started to move, she rocked herself, first slowly then quadrupling in speed as her moans got louder and closer in rhythm, she let out a loud moan and shuddered while holding on to me tightly. Man, this woman could really send out signals when she orgasms. Unable to hold on anymore, I allowed myself to cum too, I ejaculated into the condom, I think I must have spurted at least 5 times… Exhausted, we laid down on the bed, trying to catch our breath. Even thought I estimated our last love making session to be no more than 10 minutes of hard pumping action, it was intense and we were both out of breath. I hugged her tightly as we rested and I could still feel her body shuddering softly. (Any brothers tried a shuddering woman? They can keep shuddering even minutes after the love making has ended!)
After a good 5 minutes of silent hugging, she looked at me dreamily in the eyes and said, “
Baby, that was amazing. I haven’t had sex for a while now and that totally blew my socks away
!” (OK she didn’t exactly say that but something to that effect☺)
We rested for a another 15 minutes before we both hopped into the shower together and soaped each other up. No, we didn’t have any shower sex (we’re not 18 nor 22), but we made sure we both cleaned ourselves up before getting dressed in the hotel’s bathrobes. I was aware that she didn’t have any clothes to change into but she already had a solution.
A day in Saikung
We drove towards the east of Hong Kong - Saikung where there are many wonderful and beautiful sights, both for tourist and locals. We took almost 45 minutes to get there, which is rather far by Hong Kong standards. We parked the car and slowly walked towards the seaside. I had been to Saikung previously, but it was always with either my colleagues or suppliers, neither before with such a ravishing beauty hooked onto my arm.
We strolled along the jetty, taking in the scenery of the sea and the fishermen who sold their seafood off their sampan powerboats. We were like a couple in love, and many people who passed us by turned back to look at the beautiful woman I was with. When the sun began to set, we strolled towards one of the seafood restaurants facing the sea, I forgot the name of the restaurant but it was one that Liz liked going to and took a small table. We started with some light beer and ordered geoduck (象拔蚌 Liz’s favorite seafood), boiled shrimp (白酌蝦), crayfish, steamed fish and some vegetables. The food was not bad and very fresh. The price was a little more than what you would pay in Singapore, but the important thing was we enjoyed ourselves tremendously. We laughed and joked throughout the dinner and when we were done, we held hands as we walked slowly along the jetty again, heading back to the car.
However, once we were back in the car, there was an awkward silence as I drove back to Hong Kong Island. I could sense that she was not happy, and neither was I. The following day was Monday, and I would have to get back to work. I wondered if she would want to stay with me that night or if he even had to go to work the next day. When we got to the hotel, I stopped outside before pulling up to the hotel porch.
“
I hope you enjoyed yourself as much as I did
”, I said as I held her hand.
“
Yes, of course I did, but its just unfortunate tomorrow is Monday, otherwise we could have another drink
”
“
Actually, did you want to
?”, I quizzed her.
“
I just cant bear to let the weekend end
”, Liz replied softly looking deep into my eyes.
That did it. Without answering her, I stepped on the gas and pulled up to the hotel porch, opened the door and beckoned to the parking jockey. I went over to Liz’s side, opened her door and pulled her out of the car and soon we were in the lift, heading towards my room.
Once in the lift, we were locked in a frenzied passionate wet kiss. We explored each other’s oral orifices and tasted each other, each trying to outdo the other by going deeper. Out of the corner of my eye I saw the CCCTV at the top of the lift, but I couldn’t care less. Hell, I couldn’t even give two hoots if the whole world was watching me on satellite TV, it was like Liz had unleashed the exhibitionist in me.
“
Ting~~~~! Fifty Sixth storey…
”. We had arrived on my floor. Still locked in a kiss, we exited the lift, stumbling along as we made our way to my room, located 4 doors away from the lift lobby. I fumbled in my pocket for my card and hurriedly jammed it into the card reader and pushed into the room. In our haste, we stumbled and almost fell onto the floor. That caused us both to start laughing.
“
It’s been a while since that has happened to me. I don’t know what has come over me, I feel like I’m 20 and still discovering myself!
”, Liz said blushingly.
“
Yeah, I feel the same way. I’ve not been so crazy for at least the past 10-20 years! You’re like poison to me, I’m all intoxicated by your aura of sexiness too
”, I replied.